Wednesday, 2 October 2013

This is just to say (extended)


This is just to say

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold



Reply

Dear Bill: I’ve made a
couple of sandwiches for you.
In the icebox you’ll find
blueberries-a cup of grapefruit
a glass of cold coffee.

On the stove is the teapot
with enough tea leaves
for you to make tea if you
prefer-Just light the gas-
boil the water and put in the tea

Plenty of bread in the bread-box
and butter and eggs-
I didn’t know just what to
make for you. Several people
called up about office hours-

See you later. Love. Floss.

Please switch off the telephone.



Response Back

Thanks
That is
wonderful
Sounds great

I will do Your
Straight
Forward
Commands honey

don't worry
I will eat
Everything

maybe see you
soon and give
Your present

bye sugar plums

P.S don't worry about
the
peaches

2 comments:

  1. I guess the structure is great however I found it hard to find which part is which. The way you use no punctuations could refer that you was forced to reply back due to the character having not much time to concentrate of the punctuations

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  2. This is effective because the words are short and straight also e use of words "thanks" show some sort of sarcasm well done :)

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